what a cute fruit ^^ !!!
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mmmm *eats it* What a nice blank page you have there.

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blank!? NOOOO

did you leave the shadow at least? xD
n what do you think? was it not to hard block-in?

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I think it tasted good. Without a strawberry to cast it? Are you serious? No shadow. Sorry.

Ok... seriously, you did a great job with it. A few more seeds might look good, but otherwise... then again, less seeds taste better.

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another awesome speedy

wooow looks so super

Cooool ^__^

Hrm, but I guess I agree with you that it looks a little too 'hard', it kinda reminds me of your apple, but then apples are shiiiny and hard I guess. XD Maybe it would look softer if the highlights weren't as strong, or something? And maybe it could look more like a strawberry if you added more seeds on as well? At the moment, it reminds the Kei of a *cough* strawberry-apple hybrid, so the Kei is torn... because the Kei likes to CHOMP apples but hates strawberries

But the Kei thinks that the hint of strawberry in the shadow is pretty cool

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I love strawberry.. good job

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[I know you requested a critique, but it's not really a finished work critique, so I'm just going to give it in the comments instead of an official one, with all the originality/impact stuff that doesn't really apply.]

Before I start, I should say that I don't actually have that much experience with color work, and probably shouldn't be critiquing. I'm still going to post this long winded review on the off chance that my observations are of help to you, which I sincerely hope it will be. That said...

The most glaring problem is the colors. Instead of a bright and vibrant red, the red of this strawberry feels a lot more like the red of an apple, which is much deeper and crystalline.

The second more subtle, but decisive mistake is the shape of the strawberry. If you look at the photo, there's a bit of a triangular dip on the side in the shadows. It's formed by the two darkest part of the shadow which divides the primary and secondary light cast on the fruit.

In your painting, this dip is transformed into a smooth curve towards the side in the shadow. Again, more like an apple than a strawberry. A strawberry is cone shaped with a slight rounded tip that juts out, as if the fruit is going to drip out of itself. Reflecting that shape would add a lot to the "fleshy" feel.

Lastly, the dips of the flesh towards the seeds need to be addressed. Right now, there's not really a noticeable dip except for two of them. It doesn't have to be very deep or detailed, but texture is so important in the look of a strawberry that I really think it would help to put them there, instead of putting a glaze over the shell/shape of the fruit. Also, the yellow of the seeds need to be more prominent, since the color will help brighten up the red.

Oh, and the leaves feel like they're too dark with that outline. In the photo, the darker side is on the bottom of the leaves. Darken the green a bit more selectively to help the viewers of the image tell which side is up and down to create a sense of thin flat leaves, instead of thick edged leaves. But this part is pretty much nit pick...

Um. So. I hope this helps!